Thursday, 23 February 2017

Morning Swim

                                                         Morning Swim 
I see water rolling like mini waves as it froths up as people jump in. I hear other kids talking how mine lengths they have done.I feel relaxed calm is this tiring or what?
Image result for school pool
  

1 comment:

  1. Hey Caleb

    Well done for getting a blog post done complete with a picture and title. Quite a nice opening line with a simile and that lovely word, 'frothy'.

    What is this word you've used...mine? What should it be instead?

    Also, check your punctuation on your final sentence because it doesn't quite make sense... Please fix.

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